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please add suggestions! this is extremely rough, I've had like NO time to do any homework. I will work on it tonight, and fix it. I am good with presenting stuff as well.

I changed my choice to Ricky's second bubble on the bubble map.

"            The effects of the issues in Tibet have resulted in the want to return to a stable political society.  Many leaders have risen to the occasion and led up rises and marches, as well as peace talks. According to Christopher Bodeen from the Associated Press, “Last year, representatives of the Dalai Lama and China's government held three different rounds of talks but little progress was made”. Although the peace talks are present, and have valid points, they haven’t had much success. Quoting the Chinese  Premier Wen Jiabao’s response defending Chinese rule, Bodeen writes, ‘“the policies we have adopted are right’”. Since the peace talks weren’t effective, many Tibetan people took to the streets, in protest. Bodeen writes, “Thousands of police and paramilitary soldiers have been patrolling and manning checkpoints across Tibet and Tibetan-inhabited regions in western China in recent weeks, ready to head off any repeat of last year's wide-scale anti-government demonstrations”. Although the Tibetan uprisings and marches may not sway the Chinese government, the large scale use of military reflects an impact."

http://www.startribune.com/world/41205917.html?elr=KArksUUUU